tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post6426715124517538780..comments2023-07-04T07:02:37.567-04:00Comments on David Brydon - Poetry Blog: Until Another DawnAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05791591892742270029noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post-11242522028688151962011-06-05T22:11:19.900-04:002011-06-05T22:11:19.900-04:00beneath mans cobbled feet...this makes me think of...beneath mans cobbled feet...this makes me think of an attempt to escape what has become a mundane yet skilled habit of perfection.he yearns to leave but accepts this as a part of his existence.good write.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08660545422931632039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post-18705481257933988462011-06-05T20:12:21.961-04:002011-06-05T20:12:21.961-04:00The slowly fading slice of life ,of a whipped up m...The slowly fading slice of life ,of a whipped up mans mind,filled with jumbled thoughts. beautifully costructed.Fave line"spinning thoughts sown into his day".really great David!!!Sonu @epitomizeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post-84507378968333295182011-06-05T19:46:30.428-04:002011-06-05T19:46:30.428-04:00This is very good. I like the ending also. Very go...This is very good. I like the ending also. Very good images. I like the first stanza and the way the words weave into each other, specifically, the words weaving into the fabric.<br /><br />I also like the philosophical aspect of this piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post-87655453344696515172011-06-05T14:08:15.892-04:002011-06-05T14:08:15.892-04:00Wasn't expecting that ending, which is great. ...Wasn't expecting that ending, which is great. Really like when poems break predictability. "sewn into his day" sets up the tapestries / humanity rhyme that continues an excellent flow covering much ground. Very nicely done, David.dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post-32166081541198526762011-06-05T12:41:44.765-04:002011-06-05T12:41:44.765-04:00Nice work David - I like the thought of being pens...Nice work David - I like the thought of being pensioned until tomorrow :) SteveAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4410792092278580766.post-14084684681620178172011-06-05T12:30:22.170-04:002011-06-05T12:30:22.170-04:00Sensitive exploration of 'retirement' and ...Sensitive exploration of 'retirement' and the wisdom lostJohn (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.com