Sunday, May 22, 2011

Free


Image by Walter Parada
My poem entry for One Shoot Sunday 22 May 2011, at One Stop Poetry

I am before you
Naked!
so you can see
all of who I am
a bared soul
who stands
and bleeds.

Look around and see
strength in pillars
which bear our weight
of time and history.

My legs
which carry me, to you
so I may plead - a case
without a shroud.

But most importantly
I stand before you all
as a humble man
exposed beneath
these tyrant clouds

- whose free.
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9 comments:

  1. Kerry O'ConnorMay 22, 2011 at 7:41 AM

    A brilliant metaphoric interpretation of the image.

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  2. Brian MillerMay 22, 2011 at 7:53 AM

    freedom...i would get naked for that...smiles. with a chest so 'chiseled' do you really think he is humble? lol

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  3. UnknownMay 22, 2011 at 8:35 AM

    i can hear this as a speech..inciting a nation to rally or an army to victory.

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  4. S and JMay 22, 2011 at 11:52 AM

    true rhetoric for a classical image. I do have trouble seeing any humility however - unless it is humility of purpose maybe as in,
    'carry me, to you
    so I may plead - a case
    without a shroud.'

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  5. John (@bookdreamer)May 22, 2011 at 12:01 PM

    I call you to arms...

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  6. AnonymousMay 22, 2011 at 4:07 PM

    You look like this David? Wow want my address lol, great take on the photo ;)

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  7. AnonymousMay 22, 2011 at 5:53 PM

    a humble man
    exposed beneath
    these tyrant clouds
    for me to read it was a bit touching.

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  8. Steve IsaakMay 23, 2011 at 4:25 PM

    Solid, effective stuff.

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  9. UnknownMay 27, 2011 at 7:47 AM

    Sally J, sorry for the delay in responding. The humility is in the fact of being naked; not to be confused with strength or body image. It was meant to present the speaker as modest in nature.

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