Monday, January 31, 2011

A Dreamer

Eclipse by Jie Ma


Fastened, bound together in covers of leather
hard hide, eyes wide, shoulders slumped,
reflecting upon a chair.

A libretto begins, flying through the air - soft
notes, colliding, orchestrated beats. Authors’
pounding pens in-repertoire, dancing
dramatic flares.

Liberation of the pews, the congregation,
spilling balconies - spewing a parade of
ticker tape, left floating in the air.

Ostentatious, this conspicuous view - a world
beyond the rest. A masterpiece of a dreamer
upon a bench, a joy within his view,
in a world, without a care.




14 comments:

  1. nice...some great flow through that does not lose the consistency of the story...great one shot david...

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  2. I felt as if I were there with them. Great flow, and rhythm David. Fantastic read

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  3. A beautiful poem with an air of orchestral optimism. Builds to a final stanza brings the picture to life.

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  4. Enjoyed the drama and vivid descriptions. One powerful dream! Thank you, David.

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  5. This is very beautiful
    love the flow
    enjoyed it very much

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  6. Your words are crafted beautifully, the message simple yet clad in rich evocative language - love it!

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  7. spendid. a symphony! splashing sounds! enjoyed very much.

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  8. oh how i would love to be in a world without care ! i enjoyed your poem too...

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  9. in a world, without a care...beautiful

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  10. i'm liking what you do with words

    :)

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  11. well written, nice detail... JH

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  12. Joyous, poetic in both feeling and structure (even while it f**ks with structure). Excellent, excellent, excellent!

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