a cleared table
and a steady mind.
But in a flash
the drapes are closed
and hidden is the sun
-
there's nothing left
and nothing to see
so he begins - to run….
Near the edge
he reaches out
all in the hope… to find.
the drapes are closed
and hidden is the sun
-
there's nothing left
and nothing to see
so he begins - to run….
Near the edge
he reaches out
all in the hope… to find.
But then he trips
on his misguided mind
shattered, is the glass
spilt emotions
are now
dripping….
on his misguided mind
shattered, is the glass
spilt emotions
are now
dripping….
past.
Expansive written about the emotions, simple words but still expressive. Well done
ReplyDeleteReally like the way the poem changes in the second stanza and where it ends up. Nice one David! // Peter. @expatinCAT
ReplyDeleteYour piece has a nice flow with much depth. I enjoyed these lines,
ReplyDelete"But in a flash
the drapes are closed
and hidden is the sun"
Those split emotional breakdowns are described very well in terms of flight as opposed to fight. Deep poem. Really like the dripping effect of the final lines too.
ReplyDeleteThe depth your words reach
ReplyDeleteReally show in your speech
Like how you make them dripping past
At the very last
Dark times do sometimes come in a flash, don't they? Never fun to be tripped up by them :)
ReplyDeleteOh sadness there. felt it.
ReplyDeleteDarkness can be tough to escape from. Well written, and well done.
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